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Government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the univertisity. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#government #course #fees #study #univertisity
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İt is commonly stated that the school wage should have paid by the government .
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 there is a number of
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 who upholds the opposite ,ı completely agree with the given statement ,which ı intend to support my views with my arguments.
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 with, there are an array of positive economic effects for not only the academy but
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 families. Primarily, the universities should have a fund to cover the expenses of themself .
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 when the government pay the tuition fees , the schools do not worry to find the money for expenses, which enables faculty to provide quality education without income apprehension.
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, Some families may not be able to have sufficient money for their children who want to
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 at university. Families that are supported by the government do not have to think about the cost of education of their children ,and they may save money for other things Apart from what has been said earlier, the ministry should ensure education right for everyone who wants to
study
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 regardless of age , financial factors or gender.
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 means that
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 from all walks of life should educate, which give a chance to somebody who
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 he is willing to
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 , could not join lessons because of narrow.
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,
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 make grows up development of countries.As long as
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 given rights increases day by day ,it is highly possible to witness the occurrence of developments of countries in most part of the world. take the country that guarantees to pay all schools fees as an example; there is no doubt that as
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 in
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 country without thinking financial worries
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 , they could show significant achieve for their civilisation.
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 , the more
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 who want to go to course are supported by managers ,the more the number of educated
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 rises. By way of conclusion,I once again reaffirm my position that supporting students in terms of the fees of school would be very beneficial for the individual as well as society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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