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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Popularity is something that not everyone is able to attain. People can become famous for a lot of different reasons. Some might become idols for their eccentric singing vocals; some may gain heights of prosperity due to their prowess acting skills and some may become famous for their hilarious sense of humour.
Although
 there may be a different story to the accomplishment of any famous star, fame for sure is not bought through overnight struggles. Interestingly, fame comes at a cost. The more a person succeeds in gaining followers, the more they become a highlighted stories for various media channels.
Although
 they may enjoy being in the limelight of different shows,
however
, most of the time they do become a target of unfair treatment from the media and different sources. Often celebrities are ridiculed by their followers and different media outlets for their personal likes or dislikes,
also
 some may get hurled with abuses for sharing different sentiments or thoughts.
Such
 an unfair attitude towards famous people have been viewed in the past as well in the present days.
Also
, their private lives get disturbed. The price of fame does bring a negative agenda to the success of famous peoples. Not only
then
 they are followed unwantedly by paparazzi, but, their private lives get affected too in the process. In my view, personal life should always be kept aside and treated separately from a professional one.
Likewise
, a celebrity should be respected and treated differently for his/her professional appearance from personal life; rather than be ridiculed for their personal views, as privacy is essential to every human being and should not be jeopardized through any instance
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