In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is very much true that, number of health-related problems are causing due to

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food

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only.

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, a fair amount of people believes that processed

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is not good for health and I strongly agree with

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statement with imposing of higher tax on frozen and

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foods. To embark on, eating more

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food

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may lead to human unhealthy

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so that we will get sick and even our body immunity system will be failed soon.

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, there are many of the

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services around us, which we can have any

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food

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item with less amount of prices and quick delivery whenever we want to eat.

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, we are busy with our

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schedules and not able to prepare our home

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on daily basis,

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most of the employees are opting for

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food

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, promotional offers are highly motivating and

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towards

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food

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, Bugger King and KFC owners are tempting us like anything with their offers and discounted prices.

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undoubtedly, there are huge damages to our human

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lives

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due to

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food

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. The local government has to

comeup

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additioanl

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taxes and certain limitations would be necessary to keep control of these fast

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items and

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it is very much required to have some sudden audits on the quality of

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and their services too. As per

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recent Google survey findings, human body immunity levels are dropping by 5% every year due to the processed

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. To sum up, health is wealth and it is very much important to have good home

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everyday

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. The one who takes fast

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daily they may not

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physically

fit and not being

competitent

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competent

enough when compare to home

food

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takes.

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
obesity
diabetes
heart disease
health outcomes
healthcare costs
consumer behavior
socio-economic backgrounds
ethical implications
public health campaigns
subsidies
regulations
nutritional content
healthier food options
government intervention

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