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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #children #literature #country #countries
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Literature
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 provides a great insight into the accoutrements of the structural being that a
country
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 is. Like Leo Tolstoy's War and Peace, which takes its readers on a phenomenal journey through various parts of Russia and the ideology of its people. It
is disagreed
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 that children should only be taught only the
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 of their own
country
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 while we're living in a globalised world which is intertwined and connected. In
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 essay, we will discuss the varying aspects of the notion
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 children should be restricted only to their own
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 in their learning or not. Reading opens numerous doors to the young mind of a
child
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 and assists in his or her psychological growth and widens his power of perception. Let's suppose we limit his reading curriculum only to his
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-specific material
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 it's conspicuous that the
child
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 shall only become acquainted with limited knowledge pertaining to a particular
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.
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 limiting nature of studies can be detrimental to a
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's growth.
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, it is not in the best interest of a
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 to read limited resources.
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, if a
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 is given the freedom to explore the
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 of various countries, he develops an understanding of cultures and their drivers.
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, a
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 having read the theology of all the major religions will never fall prey to narrow-minded views of dogmatic priests and religious gurus. In
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 fashion, we can create a generation
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 free from stereotypes and prejudices.
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, it is appropriate to say that reading varied
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 is empowering. To sum up, it is pertinent to mention that limitations of any sorts in knowledge acceptance shall always result in a biased or paralysed understanding of the world. Fascist leaders and self-serving rulers used
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 technique to develop nations on false virtues. It is recommended that children should be free to read all the
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 available and it shall only make them more free and full of knowledge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Native literature
  • Cultural identity
  • Heritage
  • Traditions
  • National pride
  • Language skills
  • Idiomatic expressions
  • Engagement
  • Relatability
  • Broaden perspectives
  • Cultural awareness
  • Open-mindedness
  • Literary heritage
  • Bias
  • Diverse perspectives
  • Global community
  • Domestic vs. international literature
  • Cultural nuances
  • Sense of belonging
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