Today,people are using the things and throwing or replacing it with latest models or latest fashion. Do the disadvantages of throwaway society outweigh any possible economic advantage ?
In recent years, many people have been into fast fashion.
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type of society will lead us to major problems like climate change, air pollution, etc. In my opinion, the disadvantages of a throwaway society outweigh the economic advantages for two reasons.
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coffee machine, sent you a message. There's a new product. In Linking Words
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case, buying a new machine is a waste of money. It might give you some new modes but there's no reason to do it. The point is, you can change your stuff when they have problems. But if they are not, it costs more to recycle our trash.
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will lead to the depletion of natural resources. The emphasis should be on sustainable development and the circular economy rather than short-term economic gains from increased consumer spending.
To summarise, throwing or replacing can't be a solution for two reasons. Economically, consumer spending can make our market more active. But Linking Words
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doesn't mean economic growth. Rather, the governments or companies will spend more money to recycle or discard the rubbish that we make. And from the perspective of sustainability, more replacement means manufacturers have to make more products to buy. Linking Words
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task achievement
Ensure that you clearly delineate each point and its supporting example. When discussing economic effects, specify and elaborate on how these outcomes are measured economically.
coherence
While your overall structure is good, try to ensure smoother transitions between points to enhance the logical flow of your essay.
cohesion
Try to present each idea or point with slightly more detail to make the argument even clearer and more persuasive.
introduction conclusion
The introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion, and there is a strong conclusion that effectively summarizes the main arguments.
task achievement
Relevant examples are used to support the points, like the coffee machine analogy, which aids in illustrating the argument effectively.
coherence
There is a logical structure that is easy to follow, with each paragraph focusing on a specific point related to the question.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite