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Overpopulation in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

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In the modern world, there is a rising concern about crowded and overfilled large cities. It is essential to address
this
 issue,
otherwise
, it may lead to negative consequences
such
 as the deficit of provision and accommodation.
This
 essay will outline the reasons for
this
 problem and propose possible solutions. Perhaps overpopulation in megalopolises is caused by numerous opportunities there and poverty. It is not a secret that it is more likely to get a well-paid job in a big city where large corporations are located, and there is a bigger offer of leisure time activities
such
 as museums, cinemas, parks and shopping malls. For
this
 reason, many
people
 prefer to move to major cities promoting overpopulation. What's more, some of these
people
 are not so wealthy in order to control the
birth
 rate.
Consequently
, significant growth in population can occur in poor areas.
However
,
this
 problem can be solved by receiving support from the authorities.
Firstly
, the government should introduce restrictions on the maximum number of children per family. It would establish a balance between the increase and decline in the number of
people
 and hold
this
 number at a constant level.
Furthermore
, the governing bodies could suggest assistance in providing free contraception.
This
 action might prevent unwanted
birth
 among
people
being
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 not able to afford it. To sum up, the excessive population in large urban centres is a serious problem caused by city attractions and shortage of contraceptives among
people
. I recommend that governments solve
this
 issue by proposing special
birth
 policies and contribute to cheap and safe ways of
birth
 prevention.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Migration
  • Sustainable development
  • Infrastructure
  • Population density
  • Urban sprawl
  • Urban planning
  • Renewable energy
  • Family planning
  • Rural economies
  • Public transport
  • Living standards
  • Healthcare access
  • Educational facilities
  • Employment opportunities
  • Regulations
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