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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communicate had has a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It has suggested been that more and more young
people
 communicate by electric products like mobile
phones
 and computers in recent years, most
people
 think that it's harmful to the development abilities of reading and writing. In my opinion, it's undoubted that will have disadvantage for our
such
 skills.
Firstly
, it's true that rational using
phones
 and computers are convenient and high effective,
however
, most young
people
 can hardly self-controlled so that will cause overuse of electric products. Overuse will distract
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attentions
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attention
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 of young
people
 during reading
in
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 a certain extent.
For example
, notifications of various apps pop
upon
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 our
phones
 at any moment, it has strong appeal for us so that our potential aware enter
this
 app. Naturally, we couldn't read books using electric devices for several hours, our eyes will feel a little ache, and
then
 it
enable
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 to focus on
screen
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high
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 degree.
Secondly
, computers and mobile
phones
 are more likely to hinder the frequency of handwriting, as well as the formal grammatical structures in writing. In our daily life, we used to send messages as simple as fast
possilble
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possible
 by
phones
.
For example
, it probably that 2 or 3 words can represent the meaning of a complete sentence, because
poeple
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people
 always pursue effectiveness and shortcut.
Moreover
, writing has to a person has a strong ability of linguistic logic.
Thus
, communication use
phones
 compared to normal writing look
simliar
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similar
, actually, it has significant differences. In conclusion,
although
 electric devices could boost
current
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 development of society,
it
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they
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 may hinder our formal reading and writing skills.
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