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some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. why do you think that is the case ? what is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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In the 21st century, human
life
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 is more complex, whereas a group of
people
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win
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in
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 their
life
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 without being a good academic background. In
this
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 essay, I will explain my opinion and major tips for
success
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 in
life
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.
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, there are many
people
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they
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who
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 are
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success
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successful
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 in their
life
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 without
a proper grades
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proper grades
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 in school.
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, in India majority of the prominent politicians are illiterate or
failure
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failures
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 in their schools but they are
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success
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successful
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 in leadership and even they are control highly educated
people
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 in
the
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apply
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society.
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, practical knowledge is different from academic score because without
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apply
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proper experience no one can apply it properly.
Secondly
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, taking
challenge
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challenges
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 brings
people
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 to create a new world in their surroundings.
Thirdly
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,
life
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 is mixed with sorrows and challenges whoever, overcome these problems win the race of
life
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.
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, most of the failures in
school
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the school
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 system followed these principles in their
life
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thats
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that's
that
 why they are the winners in their
life
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. Apparently, self-realization is the key point of enhancing abilities because understanding our own qualities make perfection in any job.
On the other hand
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,
self confidence
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self-confidence
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 helps to overcome challenges
on
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life
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 and brings new paths for task achievements. Admittedly, more practice
make
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 more
success
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 in their
life
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 in spite of any difficult conditions in
life
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. To illustrate
this
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, Alfred Einstein did more than 1000times of practice in his theory Quantum mechanism E = MC2 square and at
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last
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,last
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 he
orginated
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originated
 the
world famous
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world-famous
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 theory. In conclusion, there is a saying 'bird without
wings'
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wings similarly
similarly
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 without hard work no one can
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success
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succeed
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.
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Life
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A life
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 lesson is more accurate than academic theories whereas everyone needs a mentality to learn
this
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 challenges.
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