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Fast food has become more common in recent years. Some people think that it has a negative effect on lifestyles and diets. Do you agree or disagree?

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Consuming healthy
food
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 is a critical and
an
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important aspect to be healthy for every individual to lead a happy life. In
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 contemporary
world
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 it is an irrefutable fact that
the
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readily available
food
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consumption
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 has increased at an alarming rate. The majority of
people
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 think that
this
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 trend has an adverse impact on their way of leaving and
dietery
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dietary
 habits. I completely agree with
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 opinion and provide supporting examples to back it up. The
first
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 and foremost important effect of fast
food
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consumption
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 is on
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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 of
public
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the public
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. There is a stupendous change in the way
people
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 were leaving in the past versus
present
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the present
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. In the earlier days workers preferred to prepare lunch at their home and carry it to the workplace, which has changed currently because of instant
food
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 availability at
workplace
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the workplace
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. Large corporates,
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, like
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Microsoft and IBM have
cafetaria
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cafeteria
 at their office premises to offer readymade
food
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 for employees, which gradually changed
people
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 leaving methodologies and patterns.
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, leading to many negative impacts like laziness and forgetting
food
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 cooking at times. Adding to
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, citizens
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 behaviours have
also
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 changed dramatically in
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recent past times. The dietary consciousness has lost its significance due to the
past
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fast
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 paced life to achieve goals. A planned diet at predefined intervals is a must for a healthy and fit body. As per the World Health Organisation statistics based on a survey conducted during the recent pandemic has revealed unacceptable facts about
the
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food
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consumption
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,
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, 76% of the public are missing the proper diet at required intervals, which has caused
reduction
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a reduction
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 of their body immunity helping the viruses to attack easily.
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, to attain
a
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good health and lead a happy life,
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet is
indispesable
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indispensable
. In conclusion, nowadays, junk
food
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consumption
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 is rising at an alarming rate. Many
people
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 believe that it has negative effects on
people
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's lifestyle and
the
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food
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 habits. I completely agree and suggest citizens
to
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focus on
home cooked
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home-cooked
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food
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, which not only helps to stay fit but
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 to combat
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viruses.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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