With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

It has been suggested that topic for discussion, how we can increase the
number
of elder
people
and they should be defended. In my opinion, there are some ways for progress in their
number
.
To begin
with, how can be elder
people
developed? Recently, I have read that from social media,
this
process doesn't depend
from
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us because the health must be defended with various activities by themselves.
Such
as the cigarettes must be avoided, daily sport trains, daily sport must be done, getting positive energy, cheerful
instead
of nervous, anxiety and so on. Briefly, I believe strongly, these activities can increase the
number
of both the younger and the elder,
in
addition
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managing rules depend from themselves again, these can't be managed by the others.
On the other hand
, some protective measures ought to be enforced by the government to protect
people
.
Firstly
, the country has to find out negatives points or the elder's decreasing reasons.
In addition
, as a matter of fact, without home
people
or orphan elder
people
's
number
is developing so I consider that
such
people
have to be cared or protect from the hazards by the government. As an example, the amount of
the
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nursing homes should be got progress, extra income must be paid and so on.
Hence
, my personal view on
this
matter, their
number
progress
depends
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the measures of both government and themselves. Taking everything into consideration, I am of the opinion that these measures and notions can assist the elder's
number
in the growth,
furthermore
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these enactments are useful for managing
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