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in the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. what do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in small community?

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In recent years living in urban
cities
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 have become a trend. In old times
people
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 used to live in small communities where they know everyone around them but in today's ,time
people
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 know very few
people
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 in large
cities
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. Living in a small area have its both advantages and disadvantages as well and I will discuss both views in
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 with, the foremost upside of living in a small community is as everyone knows others they have
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better communication skills. Due to that
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 know the situation of everyone better and they were able to help
people
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 in case of emergency.
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, in case of someone has a medical emergency on one call many
people
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 can gather around and help the person in need. Not only that but because of
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people
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 have less responsibility as they can look after each other. As they live within the
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 they don't have to travel too much in case of need as it can save time for them.
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, on the other side, due to
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 there are fewer opportunities for
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 living there.
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, if someone wants to pursue a career in marketing as it is impossible to achieve big goals in small villages and for
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 they need a megalopolis,
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 in large,
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 they know fewer
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 that does not mean it is a bad thing. In fact, as they know few
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 they do not have to worry about other
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's emotions. And in
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 they can always take the help of technology to solve their problem as now technology has replaced humans in all aspects. To sum up, I reiterate my opinion that living in a big city outweighs its advantages on its disadvantages. But with some
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 we can make even big
cities
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 more considerate with each other and we can expand our communication.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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