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In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of young people, including
the
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graduates, are still living with their
parents
. While some argue that
this
 pattern of behaviour has some advantages, I believe that these are outweighed by drawbacks. On the one hand, the option to live under the same roof with
parents
 offers some advantages.
First
 of all, it helps youngsters to save money when they do not have to allocate for rent, electricity or water.
This savings
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 may be used for emergency situations
such
 as sickness or marriage.
In addition
, living together with
parents
 can help forge stronger bonds between family members.
For instance
, after a busy working day, a
newly
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 graduate student can have dinner time with his
parents
, discuss problems at work and maybe get some advice.
On the other hand
, it is clear that living at home with
parents
 has some undeniable disadvantages.
Firstly
, people who refuse to live on their own are more likely to experience a prolonged period of immaturity. Those remaining at home are usually exempt from mundane tasks
such
 as cleaning rooms, doing laundry and cooking meals.
Consequently
, they are more dependent on their
parents
, lack life skills and capacity for self-reliance.
Besides
, from the perspective of their
parents
, they may want more time for themselves, free of family responsibilities. They had worked hard, raised their
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children
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childrens
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and helped them through higher education. After being
such
 a dedicated
parent
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, they deserve some time for themselves. In conclusion,
although
 living with
parents
 may provide some benefits, it seems to me that it is better for teenagers to take full responsibility
of
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 their lives at the age of 18.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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