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Some people think watching TV and films makes children more creative. Others think that it can actually lower their creativity. Discuss both views and gove your opinion

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Television is often considered as a source of entertainment due to which a section of society believes that watching TV and
movies
 have adverse effects on the lives of
children
 as their mental ability to create new wonders decreases. While, other segments believe that it helps in boosting their creative skills, as,
children
 learn new things from these sources. I personally have a vote for the people who believe that these sources make
children
 more creative. Primarily, these multimedia gadgets are the complete package of information and knowledge.
For instance
, when I was a child I used to watch shows related to the history of our country, zoological
life
, some reality shows related to dance, singing which inculcated a feeling of motivation in me to do something in my
life
.
Moreover
, there are many documentary
movies
 which are based on real lives, related to culture, the tradition of certain place through which
children
 can gain practical knowledge
also
.
On the contrary
, people of adolescent age sometimes start watching
movies
 related to a crime that causes an adverse effect on an individual's
life
 as he/she will be inclined towards
this
 kind of thrilling
life
 and will look for the shortcuts in
life
 to earn money.
For example
, in our vicinity, there was a child who used to watch
movies
 all the time and was so fascinated by action
movies
 that he never used to study which led to the non-creative
life
 of that child. To recapitulate, I would say that TV or watching
movies
 is a good source to acquire creative skills if utilized in the right way under the parents' guidance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imagination
  • innovation
  • cognitive development
  • creative faculties
  • educational content
  • storytelling
  • narrative structure
  • passive consumption
  • overstimulation
  • active playtime
  • realistic scenarios
  • screen time
  • media exposure
  • holistic development
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