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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. discuss both views and give your opinion

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Starvation is a big issue for mankind and can be solved with literacy. on other hand, in some
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's opinion, meal support is the solution for the same. In my opinion, both approaches are required to overcome
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 problem and in
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 essay, I will discuss both. Clearly, schooling is necessary for better jobs and a way to earn money to fulfil all requirements, including basic needs like
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.
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, farming, which is an important skill to eradicate hunger can be done better by literacy.
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, some countries have dry weather and in some have heavy rainfalls, even in
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 unfavourable conditions, through training,
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 can learn scientific ways to grow good crops. Along with that,
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 public helps to grow the nation’s economy through their jobs or businesses and create opportunities for others to make money.
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,in a few countries like Africa, where
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 are struggling with poverty, local conflict and the government are unable to support their citizens,need
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 support from other countries. In
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 nations
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, because of all adverse conditions, are unable to do farming, their priority is
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, not education., In my opinion, sometimes foodstuff and water aid is the only solution in some situations
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 as earthquakes, but any nation is unable to provide meal assistance for an indefinite period to others and a long term solution is
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education. To sum up, it is impossible to educate
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 about the benefits of qualification on empty stomach. For
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, the combination of
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 and free schooling is required and in
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 way, it might be possible to decrease poverty and train
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 for agriculture to tackle hunger.
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