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People say that a country will benefit greatly if students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a social norm that adolescents regard studying overseas as a chance to change their current lives.
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 trend can be ascribed to a number of factors and perspectives of it are varied among people. While some claim that
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 can induce negative impacts on a
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, I still believe that can help more than harm. On the one hand, I think the primary reason why some people lean against the phenomenon of
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 studying abroad is that it is likely to cause brain drain.
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 occurs when a
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 witnesses unnoticeable growth in each of
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 who stay in another
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 to leave and make ends meet. As a matter
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, a majority of overseas
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 decide to settle down the rest of their lives in another
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 as soon as they are given better living standards as well as higher salaries after graduation. Obviously, the outcomes of the strand present more of a challenge when it comes to the loss of potential figures since every
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’s development highly depends on its citizens.
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 reduce the number of young adults who are
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 working ages which would lead to the shortage of employees and affect the economy badly.
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, I side with those who advocate that studying abroad is a key factor to develop a
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.
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 and foremost, studying in another place which is far from people’s hometown can simply help them experience so many new and helpful things
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 as traditions, cultures or lifestyles which can broaden their horizons and encourage them to make standout movements or breakthroughs for the sake of improving their
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’s status. To illustrate, Ho Chi Minh, the most famous president in Vietnam, could reach his decision to change almost all the systems of Vietnam only after going to other countries to learn their ways of controlling and guiding their citizens.
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 is why
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 studying abroad can contribute enormously to their countries by learning from other environments.
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 but not least, well-behaved and polite
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 can create a positive image and impression about the
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 on local people that can bring better coordination between these nations in the near future. In the light of
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 factors, I am convinced that
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 should be encouraged to study abroad.
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 they are supposed to return and work for their
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 of staying for personal benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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