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In some countries, more young adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is claimed that many youngsters who already got a degree in education and have a job still live with their
parents
.
This
 is a widespread situation in many countries over the world. I believe that there are some advantages and disadvantages to it and it is equal for both sides.
First
 of all, living with
parents
 can help young people save money
such
 as renting a
house
 and buying food. The price of an apartment in many big cities is increasing significantly;
therefore
, it is tough for them to own a flat
instead
 of making efforts in many years.
Besides
, the youth will take care of their
parents
. In Asian culture,
parents
 usually want their children to live with them and get married to be an extended family.
For instance
, my sister has worked in the factory and has lived with my
parents
 in our childhood
house
. My
parents
 are over 70 years old, and they want her to build a family in their
house
.
On the contrary
, there are some disadvantages to
this
 situation. Young adults can depend much on their
parents
 because they are not worried about buying a
house
 for the cost of living. These
parents
 will provide money or fortune for their children;
therefore
, the youngers do not need effort in their life.
Furthermore
, the young generation may be scared of getting out of their comfort zone and accept the present.
Therefore
, the youth can avoid the changes due to afraid of failure. In conclusion,
this
 phenomenon has two sides: advantages and disadvantages. It is
also
 a challenge for young adults to decide what is suitable for themselves and their
parents
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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