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Medical professionals such as doctors and nurses from poor countries often migrate to richer countries to work. What problems arise from this situation? What measure can be taken to deal with it?

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Introduction
There are many people who have called into question the importance in today’s world of
subjects
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 like
history
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, which do not have an immediately discernible impact on most
future
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 careers. While I think that
history
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 should still be mandatory, more practical
subjects
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 related to technology and the
arts
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 are more needed in our evolving world.
Body paragraph 1
The main reason that
students
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 should study some
history
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 in
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 is that it provides crucial insights into nations around the world that serve as springboards for later political beliefs. In America,
students
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 learn about the American Revolution, the constitution and the founding fathers periodically from elementary to high
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. They learn about why the war started (so that the colonies could tax and govern themselves) as well as the great figures from
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 like George Washington, Thomas Jefferson, and Benjamin Franklin. Some of the principles
students
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 learn include the ideas of American exceptionalism, life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness, and the responsibility of citizens to vote in a representative democracy. Later in life, most people will lean liberal or conservative but still hold the same basic convictions about individual liberty and responsibility. By knowing the context in which these ideas emerged
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 can become adults with well-informed political beliefs and it will be more difficult for unscrupulous politicians to make false assertions about the past.
Body paragraph 2
Although
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history
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 should still be taught, the practical sciences and
arts
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 should be prioritised because these are more likely to have an impact on a person’s
future
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 career. Very few
students
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 will end up with careers in
history
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, as historians or professors, but a large percentage will work in the
arts
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 and especially the sciences.
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 the most popular university majors are engineering, finance, and graphic design. If schools emphasise maths at
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then
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this
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 will better prepare them to make calculations in complex engineering projects or when working at a bank or accountancy firm. Even learning how to draw and use
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 in art class is more useful for
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 because of the high demand for graphic designers on websites and advertisements. Countries that devote more of their educational budget towards these practical
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 will give
students
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 a head start on a potential
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 career and increase their chances of having a higher standard of living.
Conclusion
It is clear that in
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 a moderate approach is best.
School
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 administrators should not remove
history
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 from the timetable but in my
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 they should devote more time and resources to the teaching of
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 related to technology and the
arts
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.
This
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 will become ever more important as the tech industry continues to dominate the
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 job market.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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