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The family has a great influence on children’s development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children’s life. Do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, the development of the education system is more and more improving that aim to teach our young generation how to be better. There are some mentions showed that
society
 has a huge impact rather than the family in children’s life.
This
 essay aims to agree with the above notice and give some argument to prove
that is
 true. It is undeniable that children nowadays spent most of their time in the outside
world
 than their home
such
 as school. As the result, it is extremely difficult for their parent to supervise as well as teach them in these circumstances. All they can do is just ask them how their days work and warning them to be careful in some situations.
However
, with the incomplete development of children, it is hard for them to imagine what is their parents talking about.
For example
, in an examination, it is hard for parents to explain how shame and disappointment their
kids
 can get from their classmate, teacher if they have a low score and the consequence of it in the graduate process.
In addition
,
society
 gives them a real experience. Sometimes, the outside
world
 teaches
kids
 effectively in a way that their parents cannot.
Nonetheless
, the harshness from the outside
world
 not only give them real lessons and teach them what is good or bad, but it
also
 gives a result or consequence, which directly impact their
kids
 in both positive and negative way.
This
 is the big difference between how
society
 and the family teach them. In conclusion, the family plays an important role in the development of their children.
However
, the outside
world
 takes a bigger influence to teach them how to be better people. The
world
 is changing day by day, the family’s education is no longer true. The real lesson from
society
 now is taking part in the way their
kids
 develop.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nurturing environment
  • emotional and psychological development
  • foundational stone
  • external influences
  • diverse perspectives
  • digital media
  • peer pressure
  • social circles
  • intellectual development
  • structured knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • cultural and societal norms
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