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Some people say that government should not put any money on building theatres and sports stadiums.Others argue that they should spend more money on medical care and education.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #money #theatres #sports #stadiums #care #education
The line graph illustrates the
use
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platform
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such
 as
Facebook
 and
Twitter
 per person in a
week
 in Australia. Overall, the most striking
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 of the graph
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 that
,
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 usage of
Facebook
 can be seen in increasing trend whereas in
Twitter
 fluctuation in the
use
 can be observed throughout the period. Looking at the details, a person used
Twitter
 less than 25
times
 per
week
 in 2012 which has been declined to around 14
times
 in the
next
 year
Moreover
, it can be observed that more than 10
times
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user
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 used
Twitter
 in 2014 that had gradually increased to nearly 10
times
 and 35
times
 in 2015 and 2016 respectively. Considering the other factors,
Facebook
 users
use
 more than 20
times
 per
week
 in 2012.
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 increase (nearly 25
times
) can be observed in the
next
 year. In 2014, users
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30
times
 per day that raised to 31
times
 in the
next
 year.
Additionally
, around 35
times
 a person operates
Facebook
 in a
week
 in 2016.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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