Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness despite greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Happiness play

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role in every person's

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. individuals hold the

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that youngsters are the most joyful period of people's

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others consider that

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adults

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brings more

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than burdens.

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essay will discuss both views along with my opinion. On the one side, some who believe that teenagers

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is more happiest because they have no workload and depend on their parents for basic needs

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as food, shelter and clothes.

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, youngsters have more free

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for play and to spend

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with their friends which helps to maintain their physical as well as mental health.

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, they are free from tensions about family because

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does not

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them in family issues .

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children are unaware about expenditure so they enjoy their

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more because their all demands

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by their guardians. On the other side , some think and in my

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adults

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leads to more enjoyable times because

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are free to move and they do not need to take permission from anyone and can spend money without giving it

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second

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thought so they can better cheers their

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adults

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are good at maintaining

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between work and leisure activities.

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, many

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gym

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after their work or study to stay physically fit and to reduce work stress.

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adults

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enjoying

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with their

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partner and offspring which give them more pleasure. To conclude,

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babies enjoy their

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because they are free from stress and burdens have a lot of

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indoor and outdoor activities ;

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,I believe that

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enjoy

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with their

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one

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and family.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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277 words

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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness despite greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People, who go to live in other countries should follow the customs and tradition of the new country, to what extent to do you agree or disagree?

People believe that some individuals are born with leadership skills, while others think that leadership skills can be made. Discuss both views.

With advancing technology, the development of automated vehicles is becoming reality. In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of self-driving vehicles?