Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

In Today’s economy, there is a trend among people to
work
for
self
rather than to get employed by other’s company. Most of the generation prefers to do hard
work
for them as it satisfies their dream. Working in an
organization
can help in
achieve
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your needs of a suitable life
that is
company
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the company
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can payoff well according to your profile and role. The sad part of working in an
organization
is one have to
work
according to company’s requirement.
For example
, if a company wants you to
work
on Saturday or Sunday, you must oblige
this
in spite of whether you have some other engagements with your family.
This
sometimes leads to dissatisfaction amongst employees.
This
can be the one reason
of
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choosing
self employment
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self-employment
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. There are some other issues
also
of being associated with other
organization
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organizations
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.
For example
, you could not be well paid as per your
caliber
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that
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means it is possible that your
organization
pays you less
instead
of your hard
work
and
other
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others
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may get higher pay due to being
in
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the top of
managers
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the managers
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list for some personal reason. Because of
above
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issues, people today want to
work
for
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on
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their own. Working for
self
can be satisfactory,
however
, of
course
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there are some demerits attached to
this
. For having your own business you must have sufficient financial support or strong financial background. There are cases where people start their own business but later on due to financial
constraint
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they have to shut their businesses.
Also
one must
needs
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patience
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to get success in your doings as there are
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a struggle
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struggle
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in the initial period when you start your business. To conclude, definitely there
are
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is
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some issue with working for own but we cannot deny the fact that many of the young
generation
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generations
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is so well determined and hard
work
that they prefer
self employment
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self-employment
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.
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