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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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In Today’s economy, there is a trend among people to
work
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 for
self
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 rather than to get employed by other’s company. Most of the generation prefers to do hard
work
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 for them as it satisfies their dream. Working in an
organization
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 can help in
achieve
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 your needs of a suitable life
that is
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company
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the company
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 can payoff well according to your profile and role. The sad part of working in an
organization
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 is one have to
work
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 according to company’s requirement.
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, if a company wants you to
work
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 on Saturday or Sunday, you must oblige
this
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 in spite of whether you have some other engagements with your family.
This
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 sometimes leads to dissatisfaction amongst employees.
This
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 can be the one reason
of
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for
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 choosing
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self employment
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self-employment
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. There are some other issues
also
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 of being associated with other
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organization
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organizations
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.
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, you could not be well paid as per your
caliber
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that
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 means it is possible that your
organization
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 pays you less
instead
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 of your hard
work
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 and
other
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others
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 may get higher pay due to being
in
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at
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 the top of
managers
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the managers
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 list for some personal reason. Because of
above
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the above
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 issues, people today want to
work
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for
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on
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 their own. Working for
self
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 can be satisfactory,
however
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, of
course
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 there are some demerits attached to
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. For having your own business you must have sufficient financial support or strong financial background. There are cases where people start their own business but later on due to financial
constraint
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constraints
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 they have to shut their businesses.
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 one must
needs
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patience
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the patience
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 to get success in your doings as there are
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a struggle
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struggle
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struggles
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 in the initial period when you start your business. To conclude, definitely there
are
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is
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 some issue with working for own but we cannot deny the fact that many of the young
generation
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generations
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 is so well determined and hard
work
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 that they prefer
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self employment
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self-employment
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.
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