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Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In
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 day and age, it is
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 truth that commercial and
cutural
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cultural
 interaction has an
inseperable
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inseparable
 relationship with the growth of any
aspects
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 of each
country
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.
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, whether developing it has always been a topic of
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 public. While a number of
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 argue that promoting communication between these regions may carry some potential dangers for identity, others have a contrary-minded that it will significantly create superb results in
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 connection. Personally, I contend that the benefits that globalization brings about outweighs the drawbacks. On the one hand, it is understandable that why some groups of
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 believe that the interconnection between countries will take a heavy toll on
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national recognition. The key rationale is that as foreign influences, especially the Western cultures that permeate other societies, more
people
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 will embrace intriguingly external ideas and start to consider that their conventional custom as obsolete, which may probably result in a loss of the national true
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.
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,
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 thinking is totally exaggerated. As far as I am concerned,
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 of marginalizing the traditional
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 of every
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,
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globalization has given a larger range of
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 for citizens all over the world to introduce and open their own culture to other friends. Korea perfectly exemplifies
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 situation. The widespread presence of entertainment companies and TV programmes, specifically the "Hallyu wave", has been the key to foster and promote a global appreciation towards
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country
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 is a testament to
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 impacts of
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 contact on a
country
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's
values
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.
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, I am of the opinion that
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global development will offer stupendous advantages. In terms of business, many entrepreneurs can expand the foreign markets.
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, many jobs are created which will directly improve
people
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's living standards. To give a clear example, the contribution of
SamSung
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Samsung
 in VietNam has
hostically
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holistically
historically
 addressed the unemployment of a plethora of
people
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.
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 to
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, in terms of culture, the integration among these areas will mitigate many social problems which occurs on a
regualr
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regular
 basis. To exemplify, the thinking of
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 community will gradually turn the gender inequality sentiments on Asia society's head.
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, it seems sensible that we can broaden our
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 towards a harmonized development. In conclusion, while the exchange in tradition
as well as trading
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 still exist some disadvantages, it is irrefutable that the global changing has created many significant benefits for each and
everyone
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. It is
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 clear that the traditional
values
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 can be separately maintained in tandem with the global integration.
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