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Writing Samples
Band 6

You recently went on a trip with a friend and you both took some photographs. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Ask your friend to send you a particular photograph Explain why you need that particular photograph Tell your friend what happened to your copy of it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Brendan,

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Dear Brendan, How are you doing after coming back home from our trekking trip? I am safe and sound.
However
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, I have to do tons of homework after a
week
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week's
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 absence from college. I am writing to ask you
that
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apply
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if you still keep all
photos
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 that we took from the peak of the Baden Mount
,
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 when the rain had gone and the rainbows showed up. Hopefully, you still keep the raw files of that moment. If you still have them, please attach all of them and send
back
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them back
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 to me. I really need them as the ideas for my new painting works. You may wonder why I do not use my
photos
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.
That is
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 an ashamed problem, Brendan! As
a
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 IT student, what possessed me to press the wrong button to format all
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the datas
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datas
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data
.
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 Again, please check the
photos
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 for that moment
then
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 send me!
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 we will catch up next month for volunteering activities, copy the rest of
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photos
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the photos
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 to usd for me
please
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, please
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. You are the best friend. Thank you so much! Bye
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coherence cohesion
To make your letter even more cohesive, try adding a brief introduction before diving into the main request. A short sentence summarizing the trip or the aftermath could help set the stage more smoothly.
task achievement
Although your tone is friendly and suitable for writing to a friend, ensure to check for minor grammatical errors and typos to maintain clarity. For instance, 'an ashamed problem' should be 'an embarrassing problem' and 'usd' should be 'USB.'
suitable writing tone
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is perfect for this kind of informal communication.
complete response
You have clearly explained why you need the photograph and what happened to your copy, covering all parts of the task.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are well executed, making the letter feel personable and complete.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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