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Today’s children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?

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Some
people
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 opine that these days young
people
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 live under a lot of pressure from the public than young
people
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 in the past. In my view, I partially agree with
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 opinion. Some
parents
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 feel that their
children
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 are their prized possession ; the public instils high standards into
people
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 at a very young age and technology has given
children
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 the pleasure of instant gratification. All these lead to one thing in common. It's pressure,
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 a worsening scourge.
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, Not all
children
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 feel the same. It can be said that some
children
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 these days are lucky than those from the past. We will look into these aspects in the essay.
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 with, High social standards kill the creativity and joy of a person from a very young age.
Firstly
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, Some
parents
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 feel that
children
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 are their priced possession whom they always want to glorify whenever they have a chance. It is true that some young folks are extraordinary while others are just mediocre. When
parents
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 force the
children
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 to keep up to their expectations, it only makes them feel stress. Particularly, social media
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a gateway to mixed feelings. Few inspire by their peers and develop bad feelings like jealousy, an extravagant lifestyle and fear of missing out.
On the other hand
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, we need to acknowledge the fact that
children
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 in the past, who faced war-like situations and had gone through scourge, were more unfortunate. The stress they must have felt is incomparable.
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, some
children
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 lacked most facilities prevailing in today's world which aided their well being and growth.
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, it is hard to imagine the struggle of youth in past. In conclusion, It can be agreed that young folks these days survive stress from society more than those from the past.
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, we need to acknowledge the struggle and sacrifices of the young population in the past who lost their
parents
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 during wartime and those who had to survive through adverse circumstances.
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