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While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both and give your opinion

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There is no doubt that global warming is the most pressing crisis plaguing our planet, and if no action is taken immediately we will find ourselves in a very dire situation. Some people believe that
deforestation
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 has an even more devastating impact as compared to global warming. In
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 sides of
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 coin.
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 and foremost, we must understand that the rate of
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 far exceeds the rate at which forests are being created. The largest rainforest in the world, the Amazon, which spreads over nine countries in South America, is being removed at a rapid rate, to meet the global demand for land, which many manufacturers require for allowing to establish their factories. Because of
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 many animal and plant species are being displaced as well as the removal of indigenous people from their homeland. To put things in perspective, the Amazon is said to generate 20% of the world's oxygen, and
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 the destruction of these forests will have nothing but negative repercussions.
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, the burning of fossil fuels by factories, vehicles, and forest fires increases the earth's temperature, resulting in serve climate change the world over.
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 can be seen with the floods currently happening
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 in India and China. In rural areas of India, the burning of crops at the end of the harvest period cause a cloud of smog which engulfs Delhi and results in many breathing-related fatalities. In conclusion,
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 global warming, and
deforestation
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 pose serious concerns to the future existence of Mother Earth. An important point to remember is that in one year a mature tree will absorb more than 48 pounds of carbon dioxide from the atmosphere and release oxygen in exchange.
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 clearly shows how
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deforestation
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 and global warming are intertwined with each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse effect
  • Industrial emissions
  • Sea levels
  • Extreme weather events
  • Biodiversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Paris Climate Accord
  • Carbon cycle
  • Soil erosion
  • Water cycles
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable forest management
  • Indigenous communities
  • Localized impacts
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