even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. discuss.

Globalization
is a common trend in the twenty century, which is creating
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positive changes in economic growth,
by contrast
,
this
benefits some people
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that it will cause some negative points like fading cultural identity. In
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we will discuss the effect of
globalization
from some conceivable angles. In terms of the advantages of
globalization
, there is no denying that
,
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economic growth is an inexorable part of global linkage by helping to merge large companies from all around the world.
Moreover
, multiculturalism is caused as
result
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of
globalization
.
For instance
, by rising connections between various societies, the possibility of exchange in traditions dramatically increased and caused some ethnic groups have
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known. One of the apparent
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relations
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is the vanishing of old-fashion stereotypes in Asian countries.
On the other hand
, with respect to drawbacks, the effect of
globalization
in local communities should be taken into consideration. By improvement of the multinational organization like; cheap restaurant chains and fast food outlets, people have more tendency to buy foods from
this
popular chains rather than local shops.
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matter will have
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substantial influence on the
disappearing
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of local industries.
Furthermore
, the ethnic groups are being frightened of vanishing their traditional identity. After
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thing was considered, overall,
globalization
is so commonplace in
this
day and age. It will affect the economies in
positive
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way by increasing
combination
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of different firms and joint ventures.
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in
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could have
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on
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of local industries. I can strongly opine that the merit of
globalization
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the disadvantages.
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interesting and multicultural atmosphere is being created as
result
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of it.
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