Not many young people in countries around the world go to and enjoy concerts and plays. Why is this the case? Should they be encouraged to attend?

Nowadays many
people
especially youngsters prefer to have entertainment at home, rather than going out to see concerts and plays. It is a consequence of having increased isolation due to the newer media and
costliness
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of
performances
. Young
people
would be more attracted to attend these events, if those would be better funded, specifically by
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the government
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.
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reason why concerts and plays have lost their popularity is
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the excessive
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amount of new
entertainments
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offered. In the past,
people
lack
of
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entertainment available at home, they could read a book, watch TV, listen to music and video.
Thus
, they preferred going out to see
performances
and
also
share their experience with others. Today, one can either isolate themselves virtually from
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the real
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world with
technology
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the technology
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of VR and enjoy their time by using social media, streaming websites like Youtube or Netflix and generally
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the internet. Even if they want to share their experience with someone else, it can be easily done even long distance, due to new technologies.
Hence
, spending money on an expensive experience no longer holds the same appeal.
This
situation can be curbed by government sponsorship of performing arts. It could start at the basic level
such
as funding of the education for artists. The simplest example would be
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ensuring that schools have adequate space and finances in the curriculum for art classes
such
as acting and music.
Furthermore
,
government
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the government
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could sponsor community outreach programs for all ages, in the hopes of encouraging more interest in the performing arts. Coupling these two solutions with subsidizing tickets for
performances
would have a great impact
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the overall situation.
This
was the case for many developing Asian countries, where
this
approach succeeded and helped to increase
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the popularity
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of classical music and concert halls during the
last
decade. In a nutshell, adolescents prefer to be entertained at home
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their devices rather than spend a lot of money
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performances
. Governments help in funding performing arts can encourage
people
to be more active participants.
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