Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, violence is significantly increased

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, bloodshed, rape. Some people think that these criminals should be punished by dispatch.

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, in my opinion, I disagree with

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of all, I believe that if capital punishment was used, the rate of death of victims will expand because the released victim will certainly report the police, so there is no way that the people who committed the

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will not let the prey go away eventually they will murder the prey. These result from they do not want to be

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, no one can guarantee that the

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will decrease

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Additional security is another way to do.

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, adding more light along the route as well as observation of the police in order to prevent occurring

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in society

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, most of the harshness

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from family or childhood in the

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place. Children who were penalized severely can cause physical and mental pain.

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in the

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of violence

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dwindling the

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should solve with the root cause, not the consequences. the government or relevant agencies must have a measurement to cope with

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problem.

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, they should have a psychologist in charge and check teenagers’ mental health to certain that condition of mind is still

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. To conclude, I strongly believe that handling with the origin factor is more beneficial than using the death penalty,

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number of offenders

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Children find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. what are the reasons?how can we solve this problem?

Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying to much on technology?

Number of children who drop the school is increasing in some countries. What are the reasons and solution to overcome the problem

In some cultures, Children are encouraged to compete against each other. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this approach?