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Band 7

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter say how long you now want to rent the apartment for explain why your plans have changed tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to ask you to extend my rental contract
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 since my business in
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 place in order to work on my thesis, as it requires a huge amount of lab work and sophisticated equipment which are only available at Tehran University’s labs. Unfortunately, my research faced a technical issue and
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 it will take more time than I had originally planned. For the aforementioned reason, I will need to extend my stay and hereby, I am requesting to prolong our current tenancy agreement for an additional six-month duration.
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, I would like to bring to your attention, that the internet service provider, which is provided by the landlord per residential terms, is not offering a high-quality service, as it is out of order for several hours a day. I would like to request to change our provider
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 since
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 issue is troublesome for many tenants and is hindering my research as well. I am looking forward to your response and I will be available if any discussion regarding our contract is needed. Yours sincerely, Anita Rasouli

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Consider adding a personal touch by briefly expressing appreciation for the apartment or the landlord's support in the past.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence to enhance the logical flow of ideas.
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The letter has a clear purpose and all required points are addressed effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, contributing to a polite tone throughout the letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lease extension
  • rent renewal
  • tenancy agreement
  • extend contract
  • residential term
  • currently residing
  • plan adjustment
  • maintenance issue
  • residential upkeep
  • repair request
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