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It is often said that government project too much money on wildlife projects, while there are many other problems .to what extent do you agree or disagree

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21st
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 century,
wild life
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wildlife
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 is
exticted
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excited
 in some particular regions
where as
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 in some regions it is about to vanish nowadays
this
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 topic is becoming hot topic all around the
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 .one school of thought reckons that government has spent
large
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 amount of money to conserve
wildlife
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 while there are lots of another problem that are more important
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then
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wildlife
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 project I completely disagree with
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 given notion. The facts of
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 are demonstrated in upcoming paragraphs Considered Broadly,
wildlife
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 is an important part of
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earth's
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 life cycle. Every living being those are living on
earth
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 are attached
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 each other either directly or indirectly.
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Government
Governments
Goverment
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 know
this
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 thing very well that if they do not maintain the lifecycle of
wildlife
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 it may be harmful
for
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 everyone. For an instance, in all
world
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 ,
cutting
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 of trees and forests is increasing day by day at large scale and due to
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 activity
earth
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 has
losted
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lost
listed
posted
 a large number of important animal species that are important for human
being
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beings
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 like in
medical
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 sector.
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, the other problems that are
occuring
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occurring
 in
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world
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 are not much important
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then
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than
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 conserving
wildlife
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 because if
life
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 cycle is disturbed
in
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earth
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 there will be high chances of natural disaster on
earth
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.
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, due to global warming temperature of
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earth
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 is continuously increasing daily due to high and
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 due to
increment
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 in temperature glaciers has started melting and rivers and oceans started overflowing
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therefore
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 there are more chances of floods
occuring
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occurring
 all around the
world
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, many animals are
also
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 used to test the
new
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 developed medicine because human being genetics are matched with many animals .To illustrate, Covid - 19 vaccine was
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 tried on rats because rats have
same
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genectic
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genetic
 genes To conclude,
wildlife
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 is
foremost
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a foremost
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 important thing for
goverments
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governments
government
nowdays
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 in comparison to another problem as they are not
neccesary
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necessary
.
Wildlife
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 is a significant part of
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earth
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the earth
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 lifecycle so,
goverments
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governments
government
 should focus to conserve
wildlife
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