It is often said that government project too much money on wildlife projects, while there are many other problems .to what extent do you agree or disagree

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in some particular regions

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in some regions it is about to vanish nowadays

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topic is becoming hot topic all around the

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.one school of thought reckons that government has spent

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amount of money to conserve

wildlife

while there are lots of another problem that are more important

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wildlife

project I completely disagree with

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are demonstrated in upcoming paragraphs Considered Broadly,

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life cycle. Every living being those are living on

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each other either directly or indirectly.

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Government

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know

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everyone. For an instance, in all

world

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of trees and forests is increasing day by day at large scale and due to

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activity

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a large number of important animal species that are important for human

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like in

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sector.

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occurring

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are not much important

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conserving

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cycle is disturbed

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earth

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there will be high chances of natural disaster on

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is continuously increasing daily due to high and

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in temperature glaciers has started melting and rivers and oceans started overflowing

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occurring

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world

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, many animals are

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developed medicine because human being genetics are matched with many animals .To illustrate, Covid - 19 vaccine was

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genectic

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genes To conclude,

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important thing for

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governments

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in comparison to another problem as they are not

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necessary

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lifecycle so,

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governments

government

should focus to conserve

wildlife

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