In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

In recent times, where education plays a vital role in an
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life,
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of highly educated
professionals
are being
migarting
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migrating
to developed nations, as they are getting highly paid salaries. Not only skilled
professionals
but
also
labour workers are
also
flying to other countries where real estate business is
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industry
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so that they could be well paid compared to their own country.
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will discuss
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the effects and solutions regarding the migration of skilled
professionals
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To begin
with,
popultaion
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population
is one of the major
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causes
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of poor nations, due to which, the
unemployement
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unemployment
rate
increses
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increases
day by day and
thus
many skilled workers are moving to other places.
In addition
to that, some developing and under-developed
countires
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countries
are creating
stressful
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a stressful
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environment
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the employees especially in the IT industry, where an individual has to work
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in-order
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to
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reach
his or her
tagrets
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targets
.
Moreover
, multi-national companies which invest in poor countries, pay their employees in
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amounts while compared to developed nations.
For instance
, many feel that
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the companies are not able to utilise their skills. With regards, the
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to control migrating
professionals
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is to build up good career opportunities within the country. The companies should create a
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pleasant
environment and lest should pay them as per they deserve. The
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industries
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should recognize and utilise the talent, of an individual
accordingly
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The privatisation
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should
increse
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increase
as a part of globalisation
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so that these sectors will encourage and create
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employment
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many people. Overall, the government should take appropriate steps to provide jobs
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in order
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to encourage young people
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