The average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent to do agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Being healthy is the
formost
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foremost
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happiness and
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wants healthy life.
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, it is sometimes thought the healthy life would be lower in the future as compared to past. In my opinion, I considered that
people
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are affected by many factors which are not good for
health
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. There are several reasons why
people
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's
health
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is decreasing. The
first
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and foremost important thing is that consuming fast food. Fast food is not good for
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because it has too much oil.
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, in one survey has conducted in the UK, both women and men are working and they do not have time for cooking, they prefer junk food every day.
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,
people
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have
also
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cold drinks
such
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as
coca cola
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, sprite,
fanta
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and so on. They have dangerous gases, those gases cause
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detrimental
detremental
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a detremental
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effect on
health
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.
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,
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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diet is
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responsible to keep
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a lower
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level of
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. Another point to
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consider
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is that
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the average standard of
humans's
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health
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would be less in
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next
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couple
years
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means increasing pollution.
people
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are using their personal vehicles for transportation and they spread more air pollution.
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, there are few trees available, as they cut down for construction.
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,
people
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can not get fresh air.
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, many
people
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are well aware
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their
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and they are doing many things to maintain their
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.
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, some person goes for morning walks and they
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do exercises.
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,
youngstres
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youngsters
like to go
at
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to
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gyms to keep themselves fit and healthy. In conclusion, many
people
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have not
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for
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about
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their
health
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and they do not follow
healthy
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diet, pollution is
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major
issues
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to cause
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problems, but some
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are worry
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their healthy life and keep them fit and healthy.
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