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Fast food is now University inmost countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend , while others do not

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There are various different prospective occur on fast
foods
 .there are various arguments on the topic of liking fast
foods
 in our country.In
This
 , paragraphs there is focused on two main contradictory aspects . I argue on
This
 topic because In today's world the demand for fast
foods
 is now increased for the
last
 50 decades.
This
 is because of the fact that fast
food
 is available very easily , less cost occurred , convenient and time-consuming nowadays. Most of the
children
's are like fast
food
 example fried chicken, hamburgers, noodles , Pizza and Chinese
food
 like momos . Renold McDonald's are the best example as we were seen where
people
 want to go with their
children
 and enjoy their birthday parties.
Children
 are happier in their places and
people
 will enjoy the quality of time with their families. But
on the other hand
, Regular eating fast
food
 has many disadvantages. The
first
 foremost disadvantage is that it should create problems with
children
 health.
People
 don't know about the
food
 is hygiene or not . Most of the
people
, as well as their
children
,
children
 are used to eating unhealthy
foods
 in university or campus canteen.
People
 should have to try to eat homemade
foods
instead
 of fast
foods
 .
This
 is because not to save time but
also
 for their
children
 better future and better health. In overall phases we concluded that most
people
 focus on fast
food
 in university is becoming increasingly popular just because of some
people
 think that
This
 is a positive trend nowadays
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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