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Some people think that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Society is torn between individuals who believe that companies are victorious in luring us to buy things that we do not require with the help of
advertisements
.
on the other hand
, some bear the opinion that we are so habitual of the
advertisements
 in our routine life that we no longer pay heed to them. In
this
 essay, I am going to explore both views and express my opinion in the conclusion. In today's Era, companies disburse more amounts to advertising agencies than they invest in the field of research and development. Many ventures manage to make profits with their tinkered copy of already established
products
 on the basis of heavy advertisement.
For example
, cosmetic companies make millions on the basis of endorsement by celebrities of their
anti-aging
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 cream, which in reality is nothing but a sham.
furthermore
, strategic placement of the
products
 in the supermarket is
also
 a part of elaborate marketing. the supermarket owners are paid a hefty amount just to place their
products
 at a specific place to tempt consumers into buying them.
For instance
,
products
 stationed near daily need items like dairy
products
 and toilet paper report an increase in their sale
as a result
 of increased attention on them.
In contrast
 to
this
, nowadays,
advertisements
 are so typical that many individuals absent-mindedly ignore them.
people
 are so habitual of seeing
advertisements
 even before performing mundane tasks online like watching videos, listening to music, or surfing the internet that they have stopped paying attention to them.
for example
, I tend to hit the skip button on
advertisements
 played before youtube videos without even paying any heed to them. In conclusion,in my opinion,
advertisements
 are
sucessful
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successful
 in luring
people
 into buying
products
,
however
,
people
 are
also
 becoming more vigilant toward the tactics and some
people
 have learned to tackle the temptation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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