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Computers are being used more and more in education, discuss the advantages and disvantages and give your opinion.

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Schools have integrated technology into their classes more intensively.
This
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 essay will explain the benefits and drawbacks of applying
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 in schools by looking at
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 how it can assist pupils to study and
then
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 discuss how it makes
students
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 lazier, while the writer’s opinion will be given at the end of the essay.
Computers
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 greatly help
students
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 to widen their insights. It enables access to many sources of knowledge since people around the world can share their ideas freely and easily.
Students
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 can study practically by watching Youtube videos posted by strangers.
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, I personally study English by utilizing my computer for going online watching Youtube where I am able to observe well how the natives are speaking, and
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 led to a significant improvement.
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, some individuals believe that the use of
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 in education is likely to lead
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 to have less motivation for learning. Giving huge access to information encourages them to take a given lesson by the teacher for granted as they do not try to think of the answers by themselves, but rely on Google’s answers.
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, the provided game on the computer highly distracts them to follow the class because they deem it more attractive.
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, the reported research by BBC in 2020 revealed that 55% of
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 in Jakarta prefer to use their
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 for playing games rather than digging for new insight. To conclude, even though the negative impact lies on the use of
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 for
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, causing them to be inactive from following the class. I highly believe that it can be reduced by a supportive teacher, being able to direct them to take advantage of obtaining new insight with ease.
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