You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it
Dear Sir/Madam
I am writing to request that I would like to go to task for the main office in America for about a half year. As you know, I have been working at your company for a long time. So, I want to move to another place in order to seek a new challenge in my life.
I finished all my work here before I went. I would like to make sure my job can be done
while
I am not here. Moreover
, I asked my colleague to assist me with everything about my responsibilities at the company. In addition
, I will not worry about my work while
I am away.
I would like to ask you to help me manage my work. During this
time, you should appoint someone who can task instead
of me. On the other hand
, a new worker can communicate with me, if he has some problems.
I would be grateful if you could respond to me as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a single, clear idea. The second paragraph bundles several different points together, which could be more coherently distributed across multiple paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Maintain logical sequencing of ideas throughout the letter. Some points seem to be mentioned abruptly without a clear transition, which could confuse the reader.
task achievement
Expand on the reasons for wanting to work at the head office and explain in more detail how you intend to manage your responsibilities effectively while away.
coherence cohesion
Formal greetings and closings are essential. The closing of the letter could be improved with a more formal sign-off that matches the opening greeting's level of formality. Similarly, the opening could be more personalized if the writer is familiar with the manager's name.
task achievement
While the overall tone is suitable for a letter to a manager, work on enhancing the formality by avoiding colloquial language and ensuring correct grammatical structures.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite