IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible ina scientific research, bussiness and the acedemic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Dicuss both the views and give your own opinion?

#people #information #ina #research #bussiness #acedemic #world #dicuss
It has been argued that sharing scientific research, business and the academic world data with limitations is better than
open
Wrong verb form
opening
show examples
 them publicly. I
am partly agree
Change the verb form
partly agree
show examples
 with
this
 statement and I will discuss my point in
this
 following essay. On the one hand, there are several
reason
Change to a plural noun
reasons
show examples
 why opening too much
information
 would give
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
negative effects.
Firstly
, some type of
information
result
Change the verb form
results
show examples
 in different aspects.
for example
, the great result from medical pills on researches with birds, the same drugs can harm or kill dogs. The
next
 opinion is that some experimental cannot
set
Add a missing verb
be set
show examples
 up and
test
Wrong verb form
tested
show examples
 in
normal
Add an article
the normal
show examples
 place and it may need
Add an article
a specialist
show examples
specialist
Fix the agreement mistake
specialists
show examples
 to manage the consequences.
Then
 if someone created the test without
right
Correct article usage
the right
show examples
 knowledge or protocol, it would hurt themselves in bad ways.
On the other hand
, sharing all of
knowledge
Add an article
the knowledge
show examples
 can bring
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
many good results. The rising in communities for developing other technologies or intentions is the
first
 effect
from
Change preposition
of
show examples
 opening
information
 to the public. To illustrate, there are results shown the
open source
Add a hyphen
open-source
show examples
softwares
Correct your spelling
software
 which is developed for many purposes can make new wonderful products to
this
 world
such
 as games.
Lastly
, the easier it is to access data, the more it
reducing
Wrong verb form
reduces
show examples
 the cost of
information
. It would make people
to
Change the verb form
apply
show examples
discover new abilities and gain more opportunities to live better. To sum up, having the limit on providing
information
 from the research would suit society. In my opinion, it should have a standard for sharing things which should make sure that after publishing that data would not bring
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
bad consequences.
Submitted by chotika.cloud on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!