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The difference in age between parents and their children has increased compared to the past. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

#difference #age #parents #children #trend
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People
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 issues in certain countries due to excessive ‎fast
food
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consumption
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. Some
people
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 believe that to bring it under control, the government should increase the
tax
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 on
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food
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 items.
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, I disagree ‎entirely with its view as I feel that imparting health-related knowledge to the ‎citizens and banning hazardous
food
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 items are the best ways to deal with it. ‎ Undoubtedly, consuming too much fast
food
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 leads to many health-related ‎concerns. To tackle it, the government has to step in, impart education to the ‎citizens regarding the amount of fast
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 they can eat and its ill effects rather ‎than impose a higher
tax
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 as it will increase the burden on middle-class
people
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. To ‎illustrate, in most countries, about 65% of the population consists of the middle ‎class, and if the state imposes higher taxes on any
food
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 item, they will be the ‎most affected lot.
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, educating
people
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 of all classes about the health ‎issues arising from junk
food
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consumption
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 is more feasible. Fast
food
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 contains certain ingredients, which are incredibly harmful to the human ‎body. The government should ban
such
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 ingredients from dealing with its
consumption
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's health ‎problems.
This
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 step can eradicate the problem ‎from its root cause.
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, Ajinomoto is an extensively used ingredient in fast
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 preparations. Health specialists consider it a slow ‎poison to the human body and cause cancer. The kind of
food
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 substances ‎used in fast
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 should be put on the banned list. It will be more successful than ‎increasing the
tax
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 on fast
food
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. In conclusion, I firmly believe that imposing
tax
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 will not help much in solving the ‎health issues arising out of excessive
consumption
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 of fast
food
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 as it will not ‎address the root cause of the issue;
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, it would put more economic pressure ‎on low, and middle-class sections of the society.
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