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children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic, social and commercial prospective. what are the causes of this pressure and what measures should be taken to reduce this pressure.

These days
children
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 face
pressure
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 for various life expects
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 as educational success, social activities and financial situation. In my opinion,
this
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 condition occurs because of more competition between other
children
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 and family expectations. In
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 essay, I will explain what is
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pressure
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 and what should people do to reduce
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.
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 with, there are some pressures on to
children
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 for being perfect.
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, competition is very critical
pressure
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 to them. All of them want to have successful academic careers, financial and social situations.
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, most of them start to study lessons at an early age and when they enter the exams, they want to take
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 place and
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 why they feel that
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. ,
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 another problem is they face family expectation
pressure
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. A lot of families prefer to their
children
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 should be perfect.
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, They
pressure
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 their
children
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 for an academic career
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 as taking exam points. If I will continue with how can we solve these problems and reduce
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pressure
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, I think that the
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 solution is we should change the family mentality. Most of them do too much
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 on their
children
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 for an academic career because they want their well being but the family should decrease
pressure
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 on them. One immediate practical solution is to do fewer exams.
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, If
children
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 get in fewer exams they can forget the competition and
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 why their
pressure
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 will reduce in time. In conclusion, most
children
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 have a lot of
pressure
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 and they face too many problems these days ,
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, I strongly believe that if the family decrease their expectations, we can solve
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 problem easily.

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