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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that athe circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivationfor committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In
this
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 modern era, many
people
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 believe that all
crimes
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 should be treated equally and that the government should implement fixed
punishments
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 for every criminal activity.
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, others argue that the circumstances and the motivation behind a
crime
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 should always be considered before deciding the punishment. Both views will be discussed in the following paragraphs,
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 my opinion. On one hand, some
people
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 argue that all
crimes
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 should be treated equally. The main reason is that
crime
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 is still a
crime
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, whether its impact on society is large or small.
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, a report published in the Times of India in 2015 revealed an increase in minor
crimes
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 because offenders were released early, which encouraged them to continue unlawful acts.
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, if small
crimes
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 are not punished strictly, there is a higher possibility that criminals may progress to more serious offences
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 as theft, rape, or even murder.
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, fixed
punishments
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 could discourage
people
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 from engaging in any form of
crime
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.
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, many
people
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 believe that circumstances must be taken into account.
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, some
crimes
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 are committed in self-defence rather than with the intention of harming others.
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, a person may attack a thief only to protect themselves from being robbed.
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, individuals should always be given a second chance to improve their behaviour. If a prisoner shows genuine progress during their sentence, releasing them early could help them reintegrate into society and reduce the chances of reoffending.
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, flexible
punishments
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 may lead to more fairness and rehabilitation. In conclusion,
although
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 fixed
punishments
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 may reduce
crime
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 rates and ensure equal treatment, I believe that not all
crimes
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 are committed with the same intention. Taking into account the circumstances and allowing opportunities for reform is a more balanced and humane approach.

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task process
Plan each part: 1) view A, 2) view B, 3) your view.
coherence
Use easy links like and, but, so to show how ideas go from one to the next.
examples
Give one or two clear examples that relate to the idea you state.
structure
The essay has a clear view and a good start.
coherence
You mark the two sides well using 'on one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrent
  • Judicial system
  • Sentencing
  • Equality
  • Severity
  • Intent
  • Tailored sentencing
  • Recidivism
  • Rehabilitation
  • Coercion
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Mental health issues
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