At the present, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, the youth society has dominated over older citizens in the matter of numbers in some communities. In my view,
this
dominance could bring both advantages and disadvantages for countries. In
this
essay, I am going to assess both views. On the one hand, there are at least two disadvantages
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To begin
with, older men are more skilled and more experienced in comparison with youngsters, and the lack of sophisticated people could end countries’
industry
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industries
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labors
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from overseas.
For instance
, despite the fact that it would be detrimental for
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to hire foreign individuals, the is no choice for a factory
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faces a shortage
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skilled employees.
Furthermore
, these young people need principal requirements,
such
as education, job and hobby, and governments are obliged to provide these basics for
this
population
although
it causes
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expenditures.
However
, a
country
with higher young citizens compared to an old
country
, can make a plan to invest in talented individuals and becomes a developed
country
in the future.
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, one of these countries can establish an institute to teach clever children, and help them with their inventions. After all, countries with
old
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/aged
population
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must pour money into both health and welfare
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due to the fact that elders need more care and medicine than
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youngest
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people. An illustration is that the cost of constructing a hospital is probably at least twice as compared to that of a university. In conclusion, I personally believe that the advantages of having
young
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society
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more beneficial for a developed
country
thanks to a better education system for planning for the future, and
also
I assume that it really depends on the
country
itself.
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