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Some people believe that it is good to share as much as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People’s opinions differ on whether different
information
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 in science or business should be shared freely or not.
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 I believe that sharing data has enormous advantages, I reckon some types of info should be kept secret. On the one hand, there are several situations where sharing data could be beneficial. Academic research is a good example. Collaboration between universities even those who are placed in different continents has been common for several years. For respecting the rights of researchers, there are many protocols like NDA that make
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 joining safe and secure for both sides.
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, when humankind is struggling with a worldwide disease like
Covid
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COVID-19
, sharing findings of the ways of stopping it from spreading or curing the patients is a task for each doctor.
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, each company needs the flow of
information
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 between its employees to be clear and straight.
Businesses’
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 thrive depending on the level of their human resources knowledge.
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, there is critical
information
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 that if
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accessible for everyone could result in catastrophic events. The knowledge of the creation of missiles and atomic bombs are
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 sharing health care knowledge is ethical, the rights of inventors and explorers should be considered too. If their discoveries are shared
out
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, their enthusiasm for
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 research
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 vanish after a
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. In conclusion, sharing
information
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 freely is a good practice for many situations, but there are some cases
that
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restricting
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which restricting
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 public access is inevitable.

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task response
Provide more specific examples to support your points, especially when discussing the benefits and drawbacks of sharing information in different fields such as science, business, and academia.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear structure in each paragraph and use linking words to connect ideas more cohesively. This will help the reader follow your arguments more easily.
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