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Some people believe that it is good to share as much as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #research #business #world #information
The young nations are so advanced because they have all technology and they gain every knowledge about anything and present time more individuals using the internet and anyone doing anything in world media arly show news on time as well as internet catch whole
information
. In my opinion, Itis a good
way
 to share scientific
research
 and other movement but not possible to show some news about it. On the one hand,some masses trust that It is important
way
 share as many possible things about some
research
,business because It statement some advantages of individuals like It
way
 increasing the confidence level in young adults.The other words,The authority give any suggestions about
research
 on crowds that
way
 possible to mindful people because some adults not make anything related to society and thay
way
 increasing the scientific level and parson interest It they gain knowledge It .
For example
,
last
 year china is surveyed 67% parson searching the internet about scientific
research
 knowledge because Every countries sort of science.For results that
way
 good for
next
 date in life . Another hand , some people believe that
information
 is too important to sherd openly and that statement is good for some movements Like some little businesses.The explain Some people doing online business and they more prefer to It because they are thinking of early success in life and some owners Shera thinks related to work .For intense, Japan makes a rule any owners start new work they share online .
Thus
 that
way
 increasing the working level . In my conclusion,normally
information
 about anything is good for sharing yet if some
research
 is most important to country so
this
 type
information
 not good
way
 for sharing.
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