These days, many people prefer ready to eat food outside of their home rather than homemade food. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

Nowdays

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eat

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eating

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the

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restaurant is more popular than

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home

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because of people

activity

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that

demand

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most of their

time

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outside of

living

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place

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This

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essay will demonstrate how

consume

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consuming

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eatery cuisine

have

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positive

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aspect but will

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show it could lead to affect community nutrition. In my opinion, citizens are better

having

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lunch or dinner at

home

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despite the problem they faced. On the one hand, Nowadays, people spend most of their

time

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working

place

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and eating outside

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home

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the home

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have some

benefit

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benefits

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such

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as simplicity. Cooking by self

sometime

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take

many

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time

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because it

need

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some preparation. If they

are choose

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not to cook, they can do another activity like rest or socialized with their

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, my parent spend about 8 to 10

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work

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, and around 2

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on the way, to make it simple they did lunch and dinner

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the restaurant before

went

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going

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home

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Thus

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consume

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consuming

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food

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outside of living

place

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have

positif

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positive

aspect like more simple for the workers.

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, the main drawback that eaters face is

unhealthy

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life.

Food

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seller

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, sometimes only tend to use affordable

food

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materials to make the product cheap without

consider

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meals nutrition. Less nutrition could lead to

unhealty

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unhealthy

life and it is very bad for every

workers

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because they could have some disease for their

habbit

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habit

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many

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small-medium

food

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seller

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in Jakarta

using

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unfresh

food

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ingredients to make the price cheaper. That's why

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eaters could face unhealthy life if they keep eating outside. In conclusion,

cosuming

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consuming

food

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in shops become

trend

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a trend

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in current days. While it brings

the

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negative impact,

but

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apply

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also

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saves quality

time

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for

family

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the family

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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people
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