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some people thing online shopping is better, while others prefer going to the shops. discuss both these view and give your own opinion

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In today's modern world all people are crazy about doing shopping. Some believe that shopping through stores website is best while others think that in-store shopping is better. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and put forth my opinion in upcoming paragraphs. On one hand, online shopping is better due to the busy schedule of individuals as they do have not enough
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 to spend on shopping by going store to store. So, it is the best option to select and order
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 while sitting at home. It helps in saving travelling
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 to go through various shops to find good quality
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. Nowadays, there are numerous online websites that provide products on sale and with different choices which we cannot find while shopping in shopping malls. In 2021,
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news was published in "The Tribune" newspaper which states that 80% of customers prefer online shopping rather than personally visiting shops.
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, some individuals like shopping by going through shops because they are not satisfied with the products available on the internet. They want to check everything like the quality and material of products before buying. They do not merely that they get the same product if they order it online. The only thing is that they want to spend their money wisely and
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 wish to explore different kinds of
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 by visiting various stores. My opinion is that It is good to go to buy anything if you have enough
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 to go because online shopping is only the option if you are unable to go shopping due to
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 or any other reason. I know that shopping is
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 a hobby for some people so it is better to go with your friends and yourself enjoy. At present, all are busy in their life, nobody has
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 for anyone. So, shopping is not just to buy
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. It is like a break from a regular timetable and having fun with family or friends.
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