Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think that changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.

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century, it is known that
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is making an immense impact on our way of living. Some
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argue that it has contributed to our safety and convenience positively, while others have
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benefits outweigh its drawbacks.
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of all, it is clear that trending lifestyles include modern technologies, where
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use smartphones and electronic devices
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as camera, mails or even a wallet nowadays. Just a simple example,
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of making phone calls and waiting for taxis, we can call our own ride whenever suitable to
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location with the help of artificial intelligence.
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instance results
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the surge of crimes that related to women according to the recent studies. As we can tell, there are numerous advantages when
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and human needs are combined.
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,
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have positive
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recommendations
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and its influence,
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, how much more convenience do humanities need? We become
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animal through million years of labour. It seems to me that the more our brain develops, the more we become apathetic. Researchers found that average screen time for adult spending on
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is
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6 hours a day where it is compared much higher than the decades before.
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matter causes damage
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's life both mentally and physically. Overall, the ultimate goal for our community as intelligent animals,
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often seek to make things easier and live one step ahead. Living in the modern world demands
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new a lifestyle in order to survive. At the end of all, I believe that existing in
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present-time where
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develops limitlessly, gives us much more
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and convenience than it was before. There
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of disadvantages as we are changing the way of living to its new trend,
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, by the support of
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we mortal beings are being enabled more chances of being healthier, safer and stronger.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Technological advancements
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Nuclear family
  • Extended family
  • Life expectancy
  • Healthcare improvements
  • mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Traditional family structures
  • Industrialization
  • Urbanization
  • Consumption patterns
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