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In order to be successful in sport, some people think you have to be physically strong. Others say that mental strength is more important. What is your opinion?

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sport
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 is one of the most valuable activities among societies and a large number of people tend to be involved with
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sport
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the sport
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. Some individuals believe physical strength is mandatory, while others believe mental readiness is more important. In
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 issue. On the one hand, physical readiness is a basic
criteria
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 to engage with
sport
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. Athletics require sufficient energy in order to establish better performance.
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, football players need immense exercise to prepare them
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 real competition.
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, they will spend most of their time increasing their stamina with particular exercises
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 as jogging,
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,
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, and so on.
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, a football athlete might have
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top performance in a real match.
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, mental health can develop performance in
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 because mentality will influence the physical condition. Mentality not only might create a strong player, but
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 could give additional energy to physical condition.
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, motivators are needed to elevate their confidence and build a greater passion as well.
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, players who are engaged with mental strengths will have high motivation in competition. In conclusion, sports basically require both physical and mental readiness in order to be successful. Players who only have one requirement whether physical or mental could be not eligible to achieve success in
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. In my opinion, I will say both physical and mental are mandatory to a sports player
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 because these two aspects are connected to each other and
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can not be separated.
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