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Fewer young people do farming work in rural areas. Why? Should young people be encouraged to do farming work?

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These days, urban youth are less participated in farming
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. There are several reasons for
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 situation, and I believe young
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 should be encouraged to engage in farming
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. There are two main reasons why young
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 in rural
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 tend to leave farming.
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, youth unemployment in rural
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 is high.
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 is because it is more difficult for young
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 to find an opportunity job in the countryside than in the city.
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, when youth can't find viable jobs in their communities, they have to migrate from the suburb in search of opportunities in bigger cities or different countries.
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, almost students in rural
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 in Viet Nam like Thai Binh always want to have a successful future;
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, they will choose more developed cities like Ha Noi, a capital city of Viet Nam to study university or find a job.
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, they tend to hold a negative opinion about
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. Farming is a job that requires a lot of energy and is really time-consuming.
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, farming is often linked with hardship.
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, young
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 will become lazy and believe that profit from farming is can not cover their living costs. From my point of view, young
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 should be encouraged to join in farming
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. The
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 reason is
agriculture
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 matters to the future of development of the country. Almost countries over the world have to count on
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 to develop their economy.
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 is because only farmworkers can produce nutritious food for a booming population, citizens, especially the poor;
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 without
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, the country can not have enough food for
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, and can not develop the country. Another reason is that with modern technology and energetic teenager can make a machine that helps farmers to solved farming problems.
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,
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 can create a helicopter to spray medicine to the wheat for killing pesticides. In conclusion, fewer young
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 do farming
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 in rural
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 due to bigger opportunities in cities, and I believe that it is crucial to encourage
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 to do more farming
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 for developing countries.
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