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Too much money is spent on looking after repairing old buildings. They should be knocked down and we should build modern instead. Do you agree or disagree?

#money #buildings
Nowadays, a huge amount of money is spent by citizens in order to renew their apartments.There is an argument related to the fact that all the rundown
buildings
 should be removed to make way for modern
buildings
. I am strongly opposed to
this
 point of view and I will support my idea with an example.
First
 and Formost, Modern
buildings
 completely can ruin the atmosphere of the cities .
That is
 to say , imagine so many skyscrapers all in one part of the city can alter the view and people no longer can enjoy the beautiful landscapes.
Secondly
, it is an increasingly worrying issue that the valuable building which goes back to 50 years ago or even
further
 which portrays our values would be destroyed so it is really important to take care of these kinds of building in order to enrich our culture and background. Turning to the other side of the argument , we should take into account that , flats can occupy only a small area of land .
However
, there are so many spaces only in that small area where people can work or live there in peace and quiet.Until these high rise
buildings
 do not ruin the image of the city and provide high standards of living for the families, it may make cities and lifestyles more heterogeneous. In conclusion,
Although
, the tall
buildings
 can withstand the earthquake and benefit folks with better living conditions, in my point of view , we cannot deny the importance of old
buildings
 as these are linked us to the past generation and contribute to the beauty of the cities.
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