In some cultures,children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvages of giving children this message?

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because it is part of life and The whole crowds doing hard
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achieve a good
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of life that way tutor,cultures and parents told that they can do anything but try too hard duty .I agree that thay way is more advantages like children increasing confidence
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but some disadvantages are
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to other fields after not achievement. On the
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teenagers often say that they can achieve anything if they try hard
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making future because they started the process about
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For example
, Japan
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of 65%
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achieve goals because they
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focused
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aims and cultures played a good role in it.As a
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for teenagers because they do not need many options for the
next
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they only prefer
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On the other hand
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one
skill because they are mindset about it and doing hard
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but sometimes did not achieve and they do not try to do other
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because they are
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about achieving anything.
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cricket but they are not successful about it and they do more hard
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they are not trying to do other
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and sports because they already try to .Results that way losing success
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in the country because crowds do not try to different things they more prefer to
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side. In my conclusion,people should be making other plans about anything because some you not complete achieves but you try to other skils.
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  • motivation
  • self-esteem
  • confidence
  • perseverance
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • anxiety
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  • mental health
  • external factors
  • socio-economic conditions
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